Wednesday, February 24, 2010
My boyfriend
I got my boy friend one month ago. When i saw him first, i thoght he is ugly but he was so nice to me so i didn't care. Our first meeting was at my friend's birthday party. I was excited becuase it was my first experience going to birthday party during my senior year. I met few new friends at the party and he was one of them. It was kind of new to me becuase i haven't met new Korean people for long time. It was lucky to meet them and especially my boyfriend was. After the party he made a few appointment with me by himself and i decided to going out with him. At the first time, i didn' like to going out with any boys becuase of guilty and promise that i made by myself. I though i don't need any boys until second year of university. It disturbs me to study and make me weak becuase i will be depending on him more than i needed. However i am having fun with him. He makes me smile, cheerful including writing a text message in the morning, calling me and dating during the weekend. In my conclusion, i felt guilty to my parents because of wasting my time but also happy to be with him. I am just afraid of if he leaves me it is always hard to find my new life agian.
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Excellent first post Helen! I'm glad that you're happy. Despite what your parents say, don't feel guilty for having a boyfriend. You are a smart girl who works very hard. Dating is something that everyone should experience, it's a part of life. Maybe one day I will tell you about my boyfriend. ^^
ReplyDeleteI'm looking forward to reading tomorrow's post!
Corrections:
1. We don't usually say "appointment" when referring to hanging out with friends. In fact, "appointments" usually refer to doctor's appointments, or an appointment with a teacher, etc. I think a better phrase would be "ask me out". Ie: After the party, he asked me out and I decided to go out with him.
2.Remember to be consistent with your tenses. Sometimes you switch between present and past tenses. For example, the first line reads: When I first saw him (past) I thought he is ugly (present)... Rather you should say: When I first saw him, I thought he was ugly but since (transition word) he was so nice to me, I didn't care.
3. Remember it's always, "in conclusion" and not "in my conclusion" (line 15).
Excellent work though!
By the way, this is your teacher Tina! lol
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